Can someone proofread this sentance and tell me how to fix it? I can’t get it to sound right?

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Tori asked:


Through repetition of the motif vision, the theme of arrogance of the west.

If this could be answered quickly that would be good.

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5 comments to Can someone proofread this sentance and tell me how to fix it? I can’t get it to sound right?

  • Ho'omaluhia

    Through repetition of the motif vision, arrogance became the theme of the west.

  • NH Guy

    The theme of the arrogance of the west was illustrated by the repetition of the motif vision.

  • michaelyodepi

    I’m not sure what your trying to say, but I’ll give it a shot.

    Through repeated use of the motif, vision, the theme of arrogance in the west was portrayed.

  • Ash C

    Through using the repeated motif of vision, the theme of arrogance of the west.

    –after the comma i don’t know what you were going for but the first part should be good.

  • scottgilesmusic

    Ah… I haven’t got a good idea here what you’re trying to say.

    The word vision is just plunked right there in the middle and doesn’t seem to have anything to do with anything else.

    Then there’s the second part of the sentence, which appears not to be thematically related to the first half.

    Are you trying to say: Through repetition of the vision motif, the theme of Western arrogance [is something or other].

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